Rewrite (Video games)

People believe that video games have a good influence on children’s behavior. Yet video games cause bad behavior; video games are unhealthy for their bodies, limit their social life, and increase their aggressiveness. First of all, video games have bad effects on children’s health. Children may spend less time on their activities, such as sports and exercises. For example, children become obese and develop skeletal disorders because they do not have enough exercise. Secondly, too much video game playing makes children isolated. Children may not have time for other activities, such as reading, talking with family and friends, and doing homework. Also, children might not study at home. Even if they are in school, they might think about playing games all the time. They could not focus on their studies. So they would get a poor grade in school.
Furthermore, the effect on children's health and their increased isolation are not the only effect of video game abuse. There is also an effect on critical thinking ability. This means video games may be more conducive to children’s aggression than obedience; children who play more violent video games are more likely to have increased aggressive thoughts and feelings. They could confuse reality and fantasy. They might watch people with anger, sadness, and fear. It could cause killings, shootings, and stabbing. Also, they may not respect people. For example, when playing games, they could pick up bad language. So they would use bad words when they talk to others. Eventually, video games could cause children’s bad behavior and negative thoughts.

Interpreting Music

When I listen to classical music, I often times had a hard time understanding the music. Their musical philosophy seems to be very deep for me to fully appreciate it, yet somehow the magical sound draws me to the world of classical music. First of all, when I listen to the music that is done by worldly famous players, the music easily flows out with simple expressions of feelings. For example, when I try to express some feelings through music, it seems it is very complicated to do so. Yet, when I listen to the music that is done by famous players, I would understand more easily. Secondly, the author emphasizes the simplicity in interpreting music. I totally agree with his opinion. Much classical music is very long compared to other types of music. And that is why many people feel bored listening to the music. However, once you understand its simplicity in expressing composer’s and player’s emotion, the music is not boring anymore.
Furthermore, understanding on music by famous musician and emphasizing the simplicity are not only interpreting music. There is also joining with music. This means, you get to join their musical conversation. You become excited, calm, gloomy, fanatical, sad, or just very content from their musical stories. The author says, “Ideally, a 10 minute piece sounds like a four-minute piece.” Once you start conversing with music, you wouldn’t realize how fast the time has passed. This is just like talking with someone you love. The time goes always too fast, and you want to hang on to every second. You don’t want the magical moments to be ended. Once you get the taste of simplicity of feelings in classical music, you would love and appreciate every second of listening to the music.

Effects of video games

People believe that video games as good influence on children’s behavior. Yet, video games influence bad behavior. It causes unhealthy, breaking the social life, and increasing aggressive. First of all, video games have bad effects on children’s health. Children may spend less time their activities, such as, sports and exercises. For example, children would be obesity and skeletal disorder. Because, they do not have enough exercise. Secondly, too much video game playing makes children’s isolated. Children may not have time in other activities, such as, reading, talking with family and friends, and doing homework. Also, children might not study at home. Even if they are in school, they might think playing game all the time. They could not focus their studies. So, they would get a poor grade in school.
Furthermore, the effect on children's health and their increased isolation are not the only effect of video game abuse. There is also an effect on critical thinking ability. Which means, video games may be more conducive to children’s aggression than obediently; Children who play more violent video games are more likely to have increased aggressive thoughts and feelings. Those mean, they could confuse between the reality and fantasy. They might watch people with anger, sadness, and fear. It could cause killings, shootings, and stabbing. Also, they would not respect the people. For example, when playing games, they could pick up the bad languages. So, they would use bad words. Eventually, video games could influence on children’s behavior and cause wrong mind.

violent video games

People believe that video games as good influence on children’s behavior. Yet, video games influence bad behavior. It causes unhealthy, breaking the social life, and increasing aggressive. First of all, video games have bad effects on children’s health. Children may spend less time their activities, such as, sports. For example, children would be obesity and skeletal disorder. Because, they do not have enough exercise. Secondly, too much video game playing makes children’s isolated. Children may not have time in other activities, such as, reading, talking with family and friends, and doing homework. Also, children might not study at home. Even if they are in school, they might think playing game all the time. They could not focus their studies. So, they would get a poor grade in school.
Furthermore, above the reasons will cause bad things. Also there is one more reason. Video games affect entire children’s critical thinking. Which means, video games may be more conducive to children’s aggression than non-aggression; Children who play more violent video games are more likely to have increased aggressive thoughts and feelings. Those mean, they could confuse between the reality and fantasy. They might watch people with anger, sadness, and fear. It could cause killings, shootings, and stabbing. Also, they would not respect the people. For example, when playing games, they could pick up the bad languages. So, they would use bad words to other people. Eventually, video games could teach wrong things and influence on children’s behavior.

video games

People believe that video games as good influence on children’s behavior. Yet, video games influence bad behavior. It causes unhealthy, breaking the social life, and increasing aggressive. First of all, video games have bad effects on children’s health. Children may spend less time their activities, such as, sports. For example, children would be obesity and skeletal disorder. Because, they do not have enough exercise. Secondly, too much video game playing makes children’s isolated. Children may not have time in other activities, such as, reading, talking with family and friends, and doing homework. Also, children might not study at home. Even if they are in school, they might think playing game all the time. They could not focus their studies. So, they would get a poor grade in school.
Furthermore, video games affect entire children’s critical thinking. Which means, video games may be more conducive to children’s aggression than non-aggression; Children who play more violent video games are more likely to have increased aggressive thoughts and feelings. Those mean, they could confuse between the reality and fantasy. They might watch people with anger, sadness, and fear. It could cause killings, shootings, and stabbing. Also, they would not respect the people. For example, when playing games, they could pick up the bad languages. So, they would use bad words to other people. Eventually, video games could teach wrong things and influence on children’s behavior.

Rewrite : Entertainment

Life is hard and difficult. People have been disappointed. So they created mixture things which are entertaining. We have variety entertainment. As a result, a lot of entertainment gives us fun and happiness to cure our lives. First of all, there is music which teaches us loving and emotional development. For example, music has special power. It includes beautiful and soft melody. When we listen to the music, we could feel warm, cozy, and happy. Also, music is gospel. It is actually touching our hearts. It is like our parent’s mind. We could know God loves through the music. Secondly, we could get accomplishment from sports. Sports are activity that is simple, and fun. For instance, when we play a sports game, we will use whole body. So we would be sweaty and feel achievement. Also, during the a sports game, we could get rid of stress. Finally we could feel refreshed. Thirdly, movies give us unbelievable imagination. For example, there is the movie Avatar which has incredible graphics. Incredible graphics give us fantastic views. We could not imagine anything before watch that. Furthermore, we could become everything that we want in the movie. It can help dreams come true. We could imagine outer space, flying, eating their food, and even falling love with aliens. Therefore, variety of entertainment gives us pleasure and happiness to change our lives and environment.

variety entertainments

We have variety entertainments. A lot of entertainments give us happiness. First of all, music teaches us loving. For example, music is really beautiful, soft, and powerful. When we listen the music, we could feel warm, cozy, and happy. Also, music is gospel. It is really touching our heart. We could be known God’s love. Secondly, we would get accomplishment from sport. Sport is activity, simple, and funny. For instance, Olympic athlete player wants to get a good record, so he or she tries to keep practice again and again. Finally as they get a good record and gold medal, they would feel achievement. We could not explain about that.Thirdly, movie gives us unbelievable imagination. We could become everything what I want in the movie. It is dreams come truth. For example, there is Avatar movie which has incredible graphic. We could imagine out of space, could fly, eat their food, and even fall in love with aliens. So, entertainment is amazing and our happiness.